I was asked what is one fear that you have or something along that line. Well one fear that I have had since, “I was knee high to a grasshopper,” is being in deep dark open water. I think the main thing that scares me is that I can’t touch the ground. Another thing is just disappearing and no one knows what happened to you. It’s like what if you had a fight with someone that you care about or even love do they know that you care about them or love them? I think it’s hard for anyone to think that what if at this moment you are living up to your full potential. I mean if you were to die right now are you happy with the way people think about you?
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You did a good job but i think you need to be a little more organized because its kind of boring when you put "or something along that line. Well one fear ". it was kind of irrelevant but you did great about expressing how you feel about dieing and the way people think of you if you had passed. I think you are a good writer.
Mike i really like your story man, it comes up with real life problems an fears i like how fluent you were an you knew what you were saying throughout the whole storie. Good job man
I think your blog could have been a little bit longer. It has a good point to it. I would want to have people thinking good of me when i die instead of bad things
hey man i thought this blog is really great because there is a lot of people that can relate.
I really like how we can hear your voice so clearly in your writin. Like when you said, "I was knee high to a grasshopper." I guess i have never heard that sayin be for. One thing you can probably work on is your sentence fluency. Other than that keep up the good work!
My fear is heights. I like how you started out with a question. i don't get what knee high to a grasshopper means
I think some thing you can work on is putting more detail into your blog. Something i really liked is that you were embarressed or scared to put what your really scared of. What i can relate to is that i'm terrified of water especially dark waters.
I would like it a bit longer. I think the concept on it is amazing.
I just like how you involved the meaning of life. I think I could die happy at this point I've lived a good life, and I know my family would be sad. If I could tell them in the other life that I'm happy I would.
I like the nee high to a grasshopper compairison. Also i liked the live everday as it was your last analogie. You could write a little bit more though.
i think that it would really sick to die like this. But i thnk you need tto make it a little more detailed and a little bit longer.
i like what you think about cause if i died right now i would not be happy but you can make it a little longer
I used to be afraid of the water. I think I saw Jaws a little bit too young. I would imagine a shark coming up to get me - even when I was in a swimming pool.
I think you could or been more specific when your talking about your fears. I really like that you weren't embarrassed to say what you fear. I can related cause I'm terrified of open water.
YOU DID A GOOD JOB BUT U HAVE TO BE DETAIL ABOUT STUFF EXPLAIN MORE OTHER THAN THAT GOOD JOB
Alfredo S Gtz
I TOTALLY agree with you we need to face our fear. If we don't face our fear our life will suck.
I'm probably scared of the same thing. I get so high up in the mistakes I make and I know I can't touch for awhile. I'm probably happy with the way people look at me right now. I really don't care how people look at me anyway.
Good Blog yo!!
being scared is i think its feeling if i died right now i would not care what people think what you can work on is making it longer
i think it needs to be a little longer. its good you confront your fears. you cofront your fears and so do i even thou its hard somtimes
i like your blog cause you went in good and you let people know your fear and what you think would happen with the family.
but one thing that you can do is going into somemore depth in what you are saying.
but i can relate with you because i don't like to go into deep water either.
i get what you are saying i like the idea you have. i also think you can work on exploring new word choices and stuff like that. i cant lie i know where you are coming from because i have had that problem to and i still do sometimes. i just think it is because i cant see what is under me
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